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Old 05-10-2012, 04:35 PM
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I read that and enjoyed it - It was well written, with a good flow, and was descriptive enough conjure up decent accompanying images within my minds eye as I read. There is one typo: "Silly girl that she was, she had brought now black clothes with her, and so couldn’t dress for mourning;" - should be "she had brought no black clothes with her"

One question. How familiar with human life is Maera supposed to be? Since she seems to know of how human society works quite well - And how it compares to her own way of life. She seems to be afraid of not having security for herself and her child - But if she's always lived that way, shouldn't she be used to it?

I suppose it wouldn't make good story writing though. Maybe I'm being overly critical.

Anyway, that was well written. More please.
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